BostonRedSox


 * My Idea is that instead of Romeo and Juliet killing themselves, Juliet is forced to marry Parris and Romeo is thrown in prison. This is the scene of their FINAL departure.**


 * (SCENE I: OUTSIDE OF ROMEO’S CELL IN THE OUTSCIRTS OF VERONA)**

It has been ten years since I saw Juliet. My heart is scorn from the absence of her And each second seals the end of my love.
 * Romeo**: This sun marks the day of her final leave,

And end the forsaken love of Juliet! For Paris hath made a villain of man From when he laid his hands on my master.
 * Nurse**: (Aside) now is my chance to reunite the two

(Below his window) Romeo! Romeo! Hear these words I speak of. Since the day you hath depart, Juliet would Rather be dead than live without thy love. The man she married is nothing to thee And she longs for your loving and thy heart.

I remorse at the many poor mistakes That i hath made about thy caring soul For thee are not a dishclout to Paris; But must be the one to clean up my spills!

But I am locked in this cell with no hope Of seeing the face of Juliet again.
 * Romeo**: Nurse! These words thou speak may utter the truth,

To see my daughter live without thine love. I shall come when the sun breaks the dark night, With a ladder to descend thou to me And reunite thee with her and break free.
 * Nurse**: No more! My declining hear can not bear,


 * (SCENE II: JULIET TALKING TO PARIS IN THIER HOUSE)**

Thou light can not shine in the solitude Of thine own presence and not a soul more. I long to see the Juliet I once loved.
 * Paris:** My star, it has been a week since thou shined.

I never and will never feel that way. Thou are the blackness that engulfs my soul; Love can not be brought from a fathers hands.
 * Juliet:** How can thee utter the words of my love.

Thou Romeo is a convict and a scrap. Take pitty on me for saving his soul For I am the one who jailed and not killed.
 * Paris**: Thou does not mean what you say in these words.

For I am the one who he came back for. (//rise)// Thee took my true love and for that I hate!
 * Juliet**: Romeo returned and to me is the blame

//(Edits off stage crying)//


 * (SCENE III : OUTSIDE THE JAIL)**

But my dear nurse is nowhere to be seen. Oh Nurse, Rescue me from my solitude!
 * Romeo:** The sun hast set over the horizon,

Once so envious and dear to my heart! //(throws rope)// Grab onto thy love that was once e'er yours!
 * Nurse:** I am here to reclaim the love that was

(//He climbs down)//

We have little time before they realize That thou are gone as silent as the wind.


 * (SCENE IX: JULIET AND ROMEO MET ONCE AGAIN)**

From here thou shall take your own path to her. Juliet lies dormant where thee first met her, Go to her and make her complete once more.
 * Nurse:** (approaches) Move stealthy, for the guards are near-by.

//(Romeo heads to the balcony and climbs)//

Shall I wake her from sleep, or –
 * Romeo:** (aside) What a majestic beauty that lies here.

//(speechless)// O Romeo! Thou hath come to me in time!
 * Juliet:** - Romeo!

Is to fix dwindling hope for Juliet.
 * Romeo:** Zounds! To hear thy ravishing voice once more

For quickly they notice thy departure, And the punishment is sure to be death.
 * Juliet**: But why, my husband, have thou come to me?

And my life without thee is death to me.
 * Romeo:** Death be just another part of my life,

Thou are my hope and all that I live for, Oh Romeo! What have thee gotten into?
 * Juliet:** I would rather have thee alive than dead;

And die in the morn had been with thy love, Rather than live out my all life alone.
 * Romeo:**O my love! I spend this one night with thee

O Juliet, make this last night purposeful. For when the sun does put to death the moon; A new star shall be waiting in the sky.

This was really good. Your writing flows and it feels very much like real Shakespeare. I also liked how you separated your piece into different scenes. One minor comment though, wasn't Nurse enthusiastic about Juliet marrying Paris? She even called Romeo rags compared to Paris. Maybe her mind changed over the last 10 years. You could add something small like that.

TorontoBlueJays

I loved it! I liked how Romeo still had the attitude of dying with her love than living without.

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