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Story of the Capulet's and Montague's first fight

//Juliet's bedroom. Enter// Romeo

Juliet: I wilt live not one night without thy love. Why must thy name be mine worst enemy?

Romeo: O Juliet, wherefore art thou Capulet? Our fathers may not stand in harmony, But I be sworn by thee until my death.

Juliet: I know not what fight hath caused this hatred.

Romeo: My father hath told me a time forsak'n, That concerned the quarrel that start'd this all. It occurred amongst men who art long bur'ed, Those noble men that be our ancestors.

Juliet: For what did'st cause two noble men to brawl?

Romeo: O but both men hadst eyes for a lady Who sworn to two diff'rent men could not be. Before this fair woman knew who she lov'st, Sir Montague and Sir Capulet chose To duel until the other wert murdered.

Juliet: This bandying for such petty a matter!

Romeo: Ay, however neither be dead at all, Because their lady love came between them To cease the dueling, but, sadly, in vain. Rapiers of both men pierced her--she was sped.

Juliet: Jesu Maria, what an awful death!

Romeo: They wisheth that they may slay each other With stronger passion, but the Prince object'd. Mighty Prince demanded they not fight more, Or with a hanging be punished at once. Through deep discussion, the fam'lies agreed Not for bandying, as this would be their death, But hating each other for ever more.

Juliet: Forsooth, this hate is diff'cult to reverse! [//Exeunt//

//Wutheringheights1//
 * - This is a really good idea and I think you played out the story telling of the fight perfectly. However you may want to describe the love between Capulet, Montague, and the lady, maybe give the lady a name? You should talk about who the lady loved or if she loved both. Also you may want to start the whole scene a little earlier to give the reader an idea of what part of the book this scene is in, but all in all you have a great idea and managed to make it sound like Shakespeare speaking himself!! **

I really like your idea and I think it's really well-written. I really like that Romeo is telling Juliet about the first fight, but I think maybe you could talk about how Capulet and Montague agreed to duel. However,I don't really think giving the lady a name is a big deal, because I think it's more about the fight and how she caused the fight. - Janeeyre1

I think that you have written a great piece. It is almost exactly like Shakespeare. Regarding the name. It isn't that important but there is no reason not to add it. One last suggestion would be to add a little more to either the end or the beginning or both. There is always something that can make it better. Can't wait until final draft. Tuckeverlasting