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Romeo: O, then, dear saint, let lips do what hands do; They pray, grant thou, lest faith turn to despair.

Juliet: Saints do not move, though grant for prayers' sake.

Romeo: Then move not, while my prayer's effect I take. Thus from my lips, by yours, my sin is purged.

[Leaning in to kiss Juliet] [Enter Rosaline]

Rosaline: Oh Romeo, Romeo! With whom is thou speaking?

Romeo: [Surprised] Rosaline? Why do you care about whom I speak with?

Rosaline: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">O how I miss thee, Romeo. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">My love for thee is too strong, do thee still love me?

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Rosaline, I must tell thee something. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">There is another that I love… Juliet. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[Puts arm around Juliet]

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Rosaline: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Ay, me! How my heart aches! <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[Directed to Juliet] It is thee whom steals Romeo’s love from me! <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[w/ growing anger] Thous't steal the love of Romeo!!

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Rosaline! How dare thee speak such a way to my dear Juliet?!

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Rosaline: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">You loved me first! <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo, how can thy love her?

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I no longer feel the passionate love I used to feel for thee. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I do not wish to speak with thee any longer, <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Away, be gone!

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Rosaline: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Ay, how dare you betray me like this!

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[Rosaline exits]

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Juliet: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo, I am truly sorry. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I have brought this upon thee, <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I __best__ be going.

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[Holding Juliet back] No Juliet, please stay. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I am lost for words by what just happened. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I do not understand Rosaline’s sudden love for me, <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">She is my past, thee are my future.

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Juliet: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Oh, Romeo! <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[Nurse calls for Juliet] <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">My love for you is infinite. <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">I must be going now, another kiss and I’ll descend.

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">[They kiss]

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Juliet: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Dear love, adieu! <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Until we meet again.

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Romeo: <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">Farewell, farewell my love.

<span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">SCENE <span style="font-family: Verdana,Geneva,sans-serif;">***Before Rosaline enters is directly taken from the play

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This is great! I love how you incorporated the scene directly from the book so it wasn't confusing. One minor thing: I'm pretty sure Rosaline was a Capulet as well, so the line "Romeo, she is a Capulet, how can thee love her?" doesn't make a lot of sense (but I may be wrong, so make sure to check first.) Other than that, it was a great piece! - beachparty

I thought it was pretty good in general however I personally wouldn't of thought that Rosaline would say that Juliet is a capulet how could thee love her because Rosaline was also a Capulet. Another thing i don't think that you need to have so much of the beginning in because you could just give the setting to start. Ballet Slippers

I thought it was very well written, but I'm not a fan of taking the beginning right out of the play. It makes the scene seem less creative than the idea should be. I think that could be fixed by writing in your own dialogue and possibly paraphrasing the part you want from the play. Finally, in the line "Romeo, she is a Capulet, how can thee love her?," I'm pretty sure thee should be thy. On the other hand, I thought the piece was very well written and had a great idea behind it. - Demur Vixen