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For, I have seen not such a divine grace. Alack, now the nightingale hath sounded Has't night befallen with such prolixity? Thou'st rays are shining brighter than the moon.
 * Romeo and Juliet never killed themselves, Romeo was exiled and Juliet sadly but willingly married Parris, so she could try to move on with her life. Now, Romeo has snuck back into Verona after 5 years, to come see Juliet one last time.**
 * ACT 1**
 * (Juliet is talking with Parris)**
 * Parris:** How now Juliet, how is't thou such a beauty

//(Makes small advancement towards her, and touches her arm..Juliet snaps away.)// Fear not, my heart belongs to only one- Lo-you my kind lord, wilst thou chid'st me not For I shall take the course of Diana
 * Juliet:** Oh Parris, to say truth, I am tired

Farewell, Madame, I shall bid thee good night Till the lark sounds sharply in the morn, my sweet.
 * Parris:** Of course, my lady, shant interrupt thee

//(Paris exits and Juliet walks onto her balcony)// Will this sorrow e'er pass- so long waiting! The happiness gentle Romeo brought- To me will ne'er be put aside - Never! the sole passion and love i felt- for him! How doth one forget her reason to live?
 * Juliet:** Years hath passed, yet i still drown in sadness.

//(Starts burying her face in her hands and starts weeping and leaves the room to take a walk in her orchard)//

ACT 2

//(Juliet is walking through the orchard, unknown to Juliet-Romeo is hiding in a bush and can hear her every word//**)**

How I long to speak with such tenderness Many tears I have shed for long lost love Yearning to be touched for a sole purpose- Love, wilst thou beseech me with thy presence?
 * Juliet**: Romeo O Romeo, where art thou?

Silence not, my love, entertain my heart
 * Romeo:** (to himself) Thy words descend upon me like angels.

Who shall I look to for guidance, love, care? Tis fate proves to be one much worse than death.
 * Juliet:** Since everyone doth betray me-even nurse!

//( Juliet turns around and sees Romeo crying and looking at her)// //*// //some lines may not be in pentamer..as the character will be feeling a strong emotion which causes him to be out of character.// I have longed for thy wondrous kiss- I have known no love other than that between us. //( Juliet runs into Romeo's arms and they share a passionate kiss)// Without you-my heart has withered
 * Romeo:** Oh, how I had feared I was no longer the god of thee idolatry.
 * Juliet:** My love, I feel as if i had been trapped in a dark tomb for ages

The next morn when the lark sounds We shall set off on ye journey I shall set thee free
 * Romeo:** Then hence I shall take thee to Mantua

Boston_Red_Sox:

We had the same idea! :)

Line 5: Might want to change moon to stars because i feel like the moon dosent really "shine" it more captures the suns light whereas the stars are always up there twinkling away.

Line 9: JULET IS A VIGRIN?? LOVE IT! Thats an awesome idea because it really shows how much she must hate Paris. But then why would Paris marry her if she can't have sex and thats all people do to get married?

Act II Line 1: THIS LINE IS AMAZING! I like it because its what everyone THINKS Juliet is saying when she says "Wherfore art thou Romeo?" and then you made it into what it actually is!

Is this the end? i want to read more! Kind of left off at a cliff hanger there, you should maybe just continue it on 2 more lines between Romeo and Juliet, just so we who juliet picks to trust and what Romeo winds up doing.

Other than that, i am blown away. THis was absolutely wonderful. So many big words that you managed to fit into Iambic Pentameter. Flows very nicely off the tongue. REALLY nice job!

NewYorkYankss

This is great, but I think you should continue it because ends a bit awkwardly. But this sounds very shakespearean :)

TorontoBlueJays

Your use of vocab is stunning. This story was amazing. I like how you ended it. That moment was too emotional for words. Maybe you could just have them embrace each other in the end.