tuckeverlasting2

Tuckeverlasting2 My story: New balcony scene

Romeo enters:

//Romeo slowly creeps up to well crafted tile below the balcony//

Juliet: Hello, who are you down there?

Romeo: Who are you?... Step to the edge of the balcony and show me the women that I have cherished since last seen.

Juliet: I will not tell and have we ever met?

Romeo: It is me, Romeo!

Juliet: Romeo! Why are you below my balcony.

Romeo: I have came to ask for your love.

Juliet: Ask for my love? My love is not something that you ask permission for. Love is something that needs to be earned and generated over a certain amount of time

Romeo: It has been four hours and twenty-two minutes already, and I have loved you since I first saw you.

Juliet: That is not even close to the certain amount of time, and I don't believe in love at first sight. It never happens.

Romeo: I totally understand, I will give you some time to think.

Juliet: Thank you for understanding.

Romeo: So I will come back in like forty minutes and that would make it love at second sight Juliet.

Juliet: Romeo! I thought that you would take some seriousness into this.

Romeo: We can escape tonight together as one Juliet!

Juliet: Okay okay. I will meet you in Australia in a week

Romeo: Why do you choose Australia?

Juliet: Australia is the only place that my father doesn't have connection to so he will never find us.

Romeo: I will be waiting for you on the beaches of Australia.

Juliet: I will try my hardest to get there as soon as possible, don't worry if I don't arrive soon. I will get there. Romeo: I'll be waiting!!!!

//Romeo quickly vanishes//

//Juliet enters her Room//

//Father enters//

Father: Goodnight darling. Do you have any problems?

Juliet: No, all my problems are heading south. Goodnight.

Tuckeverlasting2 My story: Scene change in Star Wars

Darth Vader enters the scene:

//Luke nervously breathing heavily but quietly below the metal staircase//

//Darth Vader, unaware of the location of Luke//

//Luke slowly moving from below the staircase to above the staircase//

//Darth Vader suddenly in reach of Luke, quickly draws his red lightsaber//

//Mirroring his moves almost exactly, Luke draws his own lightsaber//

//Sparks lit, lighting up the room//

Darth Vader You do not need to fight back, for I will give you two options.

//Luke quickly steps back far out of reach of Darth Vader's lightsaber//

Luke What choices do you offer to me.

Darth Vader I will allow you to join me and the powerful dark side, or I will be forced to kill my son that I have yet to know

Luke Son?

Darth Vader Yes

//Luke quickly interupts Darth Vader//

Luke Who is your son? No one has ever spoken of you having a son!

Darth Vader That is because everybody is trying to hide the truth from you.

//Luke quickly interupts again//

Luke Why would anyone do that?

Darth Vader Because you are my son Luke!

Luke That's not possible, your lying! You killed my father!

Darth Vader You know that I am telling you the truth! It all makes sense now, doesn't it! But now you must join me and we can destroy the empire together!

Luke That would mean that you were partners with Obi Wan, and that you were the one who killed him!

Darth Vader Yes, that is true, and you were born around the same time that I left your mother, she passed the day you were born.

Luke I trust you and I will join you, but I will only work with you! No more working for the rest of the dark side

Darth Vader We will run the empire together, as one!

I think it is an interesting idea to have Star Wars in your fan fiction, but for a crossover you are supposed to have an element of "Romeo and Juliet" involved. For example, in wutheringheights1's fanfiction, Romeo meets Yoda. However, this scene was very enjoyable and fun to read. - tokillamockingbird

Wutheringheights1 -1. You need to figure out a way to connect the two stories, but they are really good as individuals. Maybe you could have Juliet run into them and have Darth Vader slice through her with a lightsaber and have Luke disown him for being a murderer. Then Romeo comes and kills Darth Vader before stabbing himself in the chest with a lightsaber. And that would be a great way to connect if you liked it. -2. You may want to use more shakespearean language. -3. Awesome Star Wars interpretation!

I think this is an interesting idea to have a Star Wars crossover, but maybe you can connect the Star Wars scene and the Romeo & Juliet scene a little more. Also, I'm a little confused in how Romeo and Juliet would escape to Australia, because of the time period. I think you may want to use more Shakespearean vocabulary, unless you're creating a more modern version of Romeo & Juliet. Overall, you have a good idea, though. Good job!

- Janeeyre1

I titled it New balcony scene as in modern type. Thank you for the advice though. Tuckeverlasting2